This really opened my eyes and made me realize I need to learn from the criticism.
I started out with the bird, but I knew it was going to be really hard to incorporate words in with the bird so instead I started over with just the word Phoenix. I tried to make the word look like it was burning and crispy at the top as if to be reborn. I wanted the bottom to look like ashes. Then I took the bird and put it over the word phoenix and it was really effective. I added in be a phoenix over and over at the bottom to emphasis the encouraging words.
I really like this piece. It is really well done with the color scheme from the reds to the oranges on the black background and the gradient on the lettering. I particularly like how the phoenix appears to be flowing through the letters.
ReplyDeleteThis piece is very cool, I like how the word is part of the bird and how the word is on fire. Something I would change is to take out the same phrases at the bottom, because the main word "phoenix" speaks enough for itself.
ReplyDeleteThe Phoenix image looks like a phoenix in two ways, of course the bird image drawn, but also I think the typography was morphed into appearing like ears of a phoenix. I dig it. I do like how you took the criticism form your last critique in a way of growth rather than defeat. You'll soon see the more critiques you experience, the more you learn to apply given feedback to projects outside from the specific one being critiqued.
ReplyDeleteI really like your story you've attached to this project too.
Critique though? I'd bring in some of the yellow from the sketched Phoenix into your type so it feels/looks more unified. You literally have a bird there, and it fits the word well, but not visually.
This piece is awesome. I love the colors you used. I also really like how the phrase "be a phoenix" is not only repeated but fades to black as it goes down. My suggestion is to not let the word phoenix disappear as it goes down. It can get a little confusing with the repeated phrase at the bottom.
ReplyDeleteThe drawing of the phoenix you did is wonderful. It really shows your skills with illustrator. I love the gradient use in the word 'Phoenix'. The thing I would have changed is the words on the bottom, I would have either taken them out or made them blend more with the piece. They are kind of just randomly there.
ReplyDeleteI really like the look of the work with the actual phoenix intermingling with it. i don't think you need the phrase at the bottom of the page its seems like it distracts more from the main work than it adds to it.
ReplyDeleteI like the shining parts of this project. But I think you should change the font of the words, because it looks a little bit colorful now.
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